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fanfic: Fear (part 2) - athene — LiveJournal
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fanfic: Fear (part 2)
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fififolle From: fififolle Date: June 11th, 2010 09:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yaaaaaayyyy!!! *squees a little too loudly*
Just... awesome. I loved the way you managed to whump Ryan sooooooooooooooooooo badly *g*
All he could see was orange blobs and you dropped him in a spider's web? You are so evil :D

The thought of leaving his lover here as carrion for fuck knows what prehistoric creatures betrayed every promise he had ever made, and he felt empty, ripped open and raw.
From about here, I kept getting these little angsty twinges in my gut, it was beautiful *quiverysigh*

Yay! Touching! Happiness! ♥
deinonychus_1 From: deinonychus_1 Date: June 11th, 2010 09:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks a lot for all the help with this one, also the atmosphere research earlier on. I tried to get the oxygen stuff right, even if the rest of the biology was based on purest madeupium!

I couldn't resist the spider web bit, so even after I went back to the original version I expanded it and slipped that bit in as well *evil grin*. And since you asked so nicely, there was extra touching at the end.
fififolle From: fififolle Date: June 12th, 2010 04:06 pm (UTC) (Link)
It was so perfect! Thank you! I loved the ending :D

You did an awesome job on the oxygen thing, it's quite scary, isn't it?
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